I was happy that during this critique, I received more feedback than the previous session for the other module. The feedback definitely gave me plenty to consider and experiment with before the final hand-in, in January. For both projects I had included more designs than I will need for assessment and saw the design critique as a great opportunity to get an idea of my peer’s opinions. This would help me decide what ideas to pursue and which to leave, I definitely feel, I am much clearer on which ideas to refine for submission. The session was very useful, and I have included screenshots below of my work and the feedback.
For Project 1: Point Line and Plane, I didn’t receive a lot of feedback, but from my lecturer’s verbal feedback and what I did receive, I feel my work is on the right track, I am hitting the brief and the work is of a good standard, I will of course, look at all the pieces again to see if any improvements can be made, but I am happy with my work, with only very minor improvements required.
For Project 2: A Design for screen which demonstrates one of the Articles of the UN Universal Declaration of Human Rights, I received much more feedback, after consideration I have decided to pursue the designs for Article 4, as they are stronger, though I appreciate the feedback I received for the other designs and it definitely would have improved the designs had I wanted to proceed with them.
The feedback I received for the designs I want to pursue, is also very useful, I don’t agree that the design with the shackles is the best, but design is subjective and I appreciate the comment. I do believe on the other designs the feedback I received is fair and my designs could be improved by doing some more experimentation, especially with the kerning. I kept the kerning deliberately tight to as this was a common theme of one of my design inspirations Wim Crouwel, but I do need to find a balance between the look and the readability of the work. I also think the comment of the number four being lost in the design with the black background, is a fair remark and I think with some adjustment to the opacity, and maybe switching the layer order I can make this clearer to the viewer and improve the design.
After the critique session I decided to experiment further with my designs, using the feedback as a starting point. Below are some new iterations of my designs.
Whilst I don’t think I have arrived at my final design as yet, I think by combining the best elements of these, I will find my final design for submission.